Power of one SEXXY paragraph

In English class, we have been learning how to write a SEXXY paragraph. Here is my SEXXY paragraph on the movie Power of One, by John Avilsen. Paige and I worked on this SEXXY paragraph together. 

                                                                                                                                                                                                    

In this prison scene, the director uses this long shot effectively. In this long shot, we see sergeant Bormann holding his baton, Pk, Geel Piet, Doc, and some prisoners. The aspect of this long shot has an effect of suspiciousness and possible violence in the next scene. This long shot can be juxtaposed to the scene showing Maria's fathers house. The difference between the prison and the mansion is very drastic